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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn about current events. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
 can approach
to
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the
news
 and information through various types of
media
. Some individuals think that
newspapers
 are irreplaceable, while others disagree and argue that they can receive information more effectively through other
media
. I totally agree with the latter view, the reason
of
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 my opinion and both of these viewpoints will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, journalism is the common traditional
media
 that
being
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 used for a long time, so it might seem
resonable
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reasonable
responsible
 for some to argue that
newspapers
is
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 the best
media
.
Although
,
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 there are numerous types of
media
 these days, many
people
 still read the
newspapers
, especially
adult
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 and elderly
people
.
This
 is might because not everyone
have
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 the same access to technology as electronic devices are not affordable for all. To illustrate, some elderly do not know how to use smartphones,
then
 the best way to learn about current
news
 and keep up to date is from
this
 classic print
media
.
On the other hand
, I personally believe that there are advancements
of
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 technology that provide us with various new effective ways to access
to
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the
news
. Broadcast is the example of
media
 that become popular among
people
 in
this
 era, as even children can learn
news
 from TV programs or listen
through
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 the radio.
Additionally
,
People
 can
also
 use
internet
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 in order to keep knowing the situation that happened around the world. Internet,
not
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is not
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 only the fastest way to
recieve
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receive
 information, but it is
also
 the easiest way for
people
 to engage with
these
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news
, by comments or sharing the
news
to
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 their social
media
.
For instance
, if
people
 were looking for their
losing
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 pet and
post
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posting
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 it on the internet with a large number of sharing, they would have found it in just
few
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a few
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 days because of social
media
 power. In conclusion, even
people
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though people
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 were influenced by print
media
 in the past, it can be replaced by new other types of
media
 that have been innovated lately. I personally think that
newspapers
 are old school and other
media
 will be used predominantly in future.
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