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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside this vehicle will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to the rapid improvement of technology,
people
 can predict all
vehicle
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vehicles
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 will become
driverless
 in the future. Some
people
 support
that
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driverless
vehicles
 have more positive impacts
to
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human
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, whereas others argue that there are more drawbacks
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this
 issue. In
this
 essay, I will briefly explain
to
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both
side
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 of use and give my own opinion.
First
 of all, safety is the main benefit of
driverless
vehicles
. Clearly, there are many
car
 accidents are caused by
human
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humans
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.
For example
, drowsy driving and
drunk
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the drunk
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 driver.
Moreover
, with the
driverless
car
,
people
 can avoid driving
while
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when
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 they have bad body
condition
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conditions
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.
In addition
,
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 can react faster than
human
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humans
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 when
the
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they
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 situation
of
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car
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the car
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 because
computer
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computers
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do
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 not have
emotion
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emotions
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, so
it
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they
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 just
follow
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 the process and
achieve
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 the instruction.
Secondly
, without driving,
people
 can save more time during the journey.
For example
, if employees have a
driverless
car
, they can prepare some documents or even do some online
meeting
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meetings
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 before they arrive
their
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 destination.
Furthermore
,
human
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 can focus on
the
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apply
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task which is more complex.
On the other hand
, there
are
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 some negative
effect
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effects
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.
First
,
the
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driverless
vehicles
 may exacerbate
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 situation, especially in
driving
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the driving
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 industry.
Second
, the public
are not believe
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does not believe
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 in modern innovation.
People
 nowadays trust
human
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humans
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 more than AI.
Additionally
, high technology devices usually
breakdown
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 accidentally. To sum up, it seems that there are still some drawbacks of
travelers
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vehicles
,
however
, the advantages and functions are more beneficial to
human
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humans
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.
Although
 some
people
 need more time to
adapt
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adopt
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new
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innovation
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innovations
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, it will be a trend in the future.
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