In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that in various nations obesity and
health
issues are very common in children
and it is the duty of the government
to resolve this
problem. I firmly believe,
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this
matter can be sorted out if the governing bodies take necessary
measures.
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To begin
with, it is widely seen nowadays, that many youngsters are becoming overweight and are suffering from many health related
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health-related
such
as diabetes and anemia
. One of the main reasons responsible for Change the spelling
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is consumption
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the consumption
food
. However
, authorties
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authorities
such
as imposing more tax on unhealthy eateries. One of the best example
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examples
this
can be seen in the USA where government
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the government
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food
which has consequently
led to a sharp decline in the number of consumers specially
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the younger
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food
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.
Another step which authorities can take, so, that this
problem can be mitigated is health
awareness programmes. Health
workers can be employed by the government
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benefitof
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issues in the younger age group, the governing bodies have employed many health
workers who visit schools and colleges and motivate children
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government's
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this
problem can be easily addressed.
To conclude, unhealthy lifestyle and eating habbits
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children
nowadays and these are responsible for many health related
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health-related
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