In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that in various nations obesity and
health
issues are very common in
children
and it is the duty of the
government
to resolve
this
problem. I firmly believe
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that
this
matter can be sorted out if the governing bodies take
necessary
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measures.
To begin
with, it is widely seen nowadays, that many youngsters are becoming overweight and are suffering from many
health related
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problems
such
as diabetes and
anemia
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. One of the main reasons responsible for
this
is
consumption
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of junk and processed
food
.
However
,
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authorities
can take certain measures
such
as imposing more tax on unhealthy eateries. One of the best
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of
this
can be seen in the USA where
government
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has raised the taxes on
the
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junk
food
which has
consequently
led to a sharp decline in the number of consumers
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younger
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age group.
Therefore
, in
this
way governing bodies can limit
consumption
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of unhealthy
food
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children
. Another step which authorities can take, so, that
this
problem can be mitigated is
health
awareness programmes.
Health
workers can be employed by the
government
to carry out
such
programmes
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benefitof
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benefit of
the youth.
For instance
, in India pertaining to
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in obesity and
health
issues in the younger age group, the governing bodies have employed many
health
workers who visit schools and colleges and motivate
children
to opt for
healthy
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diet. Henceforth, by
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initiative
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this
problem can be easily addressed. To conclude, unhealthy lifestyle and eating
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habits
are very much prevalent in
children
nowadays and these are responsible for many
health related
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problems.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, if the
government
takes essential steps
this
issue can be solved by implementing more taxes on unhealthy
food
and motivating
younger
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the younger
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age
group
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to consume healthy for a better life.
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