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Many governments thinks that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people , however , think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Government officials are of the opinion that economic growth is most relevant.
However
, many individuals believe that the different kinds of progress are
also
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the
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society. I am of the opinion that in as much as the financial growth of a nation are important, they are other
sectors
 that subsidies it
such
 as educational
sectors
 and health practice. On the one hand, economic progress is the ability of a society to increase
in
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their
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 capability to produce higher-valued (more and better) goods and services with the use of the same or equivalent resources. By so doing it paves way for
improved
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 standard of living
also
 by alleviating poverty and
this
 allows them to get essential goods for
living
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.
For instance
, in a survey by Samuelson 2001, if people have
high
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 income, they can consume more luxury goods and stimulate aggregate demand.
Also
, financial growth increases the employment rates of a country as
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 tends to employ more workers
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 much production.
On the other hand
,many
sectors
 in the society would actually benefit the community more, like improvement of the health practice which can be achieved by allocating
adequate
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 budget and making available proper equipment needed in the hospital.
Likewise
 , in the education sector teachers no longer find satisfaction in their job due to lack of payment and in
availability
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 of necessary items required for learning.
For instance
, during the era of
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corona virus
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 pandemic, Nigeria as a whole couldn’t account for up to 20 ventilators and
this
 cost many individuals
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 life due to the
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 of the nation. In conclusion, in as much as the economic progress is beneficial, I feel that government should look more into the health and
educational
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education
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sectors
 as it will benefit the populace and reduce loss of life and academic dropout and tyranny. 302 words

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