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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The most powerful weapon, which we all know, is the nuclear weapon. And along with it, are the consequences that we have witnessed in human history.
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, some people believe that it brings advantages to the world. I disagree with
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 viewpoint, and I will explain why in the following paragraphs.
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, because of the devastating destructive power of nuclear
weapons
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 on humans and the
environment
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, moral and ethnic values should be considered when deciding whether or not to use them.
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, the two cities in Japan experienced a direct detonation that caused a mass loss of civilian life from nuclear
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 that would go far beyond any other weapon invented.
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 resulted in the deaths of over 200,000 civilians and military personnel on both sides of the conflict.
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, in the quest to develop
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 technology, researchers have generated about 2000 test explosions since 1980, which has increased the exposure of the world’s population to radiation and the unrestrained release into the
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 of the radioactive materials that have been dispersed and deposited everywhere on the planet, which may lead to the contamination of air, soil, water, and the food supply.
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, when the detonations of nuclear
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 occur, they will release radiation, which is a scientifically proven carcinogen in humans,
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 as lung and breast cancers. Admittedly, there are some advantages to nuclear
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,
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 as defending a country’s border, generating electricity from nuclear reactors, or helping to diagnose and treat several diseases.
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, compared to the disadvantages that humans and the
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 have suffered, the consequences seem worse than the benefits that have been achieved so far. In conclusion, using destructive
weapons
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 is not the right way to make the world a peaceful place to live because it has negative effects on people and the
environment
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.
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