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Television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some folks feel that nowadays television is not fully capable of replacing the learning materials
such
 as books and
as a result
 of
it
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 we can observe less-educated children around. In general, it's difficult to fully agree with
this
 statement,
that is
 why I will provide some alternative points below.
To begin
 with, TV in the modern world partly shifted to smart devices
such
 as laptops, tablets and mobile phones.
Moreover
, it's quite convenient to watch any programme at any time suitable for one through modern technologies.
For instance
, students can decide when it is a proper time to get educated during the day and week,
hence
 they can shape an individual approach across a school curriculum.
Additionally
, it's not a TV which influences a lower quality of education, but an infinite number of the content we can observe currently on TV or any other sources.
This
 is why children should be clearly navigated on how to focus on the right educational content and prioritize the tasks during the day by the Seniors. As an example, I and my wife tend to use a planning technique with our son in order to give him enough time for the entertainment but
also
 to learn and do the things that matter. To sum up, our world is changing like never before, and sometimes we all need to adjust our approach towards anything but most importantly education frequently and analyze what works better with the younger generation and try to implement, monitor and learn,
then
 modify in case of need to improve the method.
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