The increased world demand for oil in gas has made it necessary for locating these resources in remote and untouched natural areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these nature areas?

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In the current world that we live in, the need for oil and gas has been on an increasing trend not limited to the recent years.
This
has forced mankind to explore and find additional extraction places even if they are absolutely on the new horizons of earth. Personally, I feel that it would have an irreversible effect on the environment thereby affecting nature. As it has a plethora of usages on different aspects for almost all the people in many walks of life, advantages of
this
means of fuel are primarily contributing to transportation and energy generation. Indirectly these are paving way for not only the better reachability for people in rural areas to better facilities for their health and educational means but
also
for getting a better job not limited to their nearby places. But the shortcomings that it brings with it when its usage is over the limit and
also
the sole dependence on it is looking to be huge and will never be replaceable. There are some serious concerns that have bloomed into major detrimental factors on its usage,
firstly
, the greenhouse gas emission and the effect of global warming is very evident in recent years and in near future,
secondly
, by not having a sustainable replacement for the oils and gases with ever-increasing population is making the cost to skyrocket in certain situations taking a toll on the economy of the family,
lastly
, I am always wondering on what would happen to the biological ecosystem if all the natural resources have been sucked from the earth even at the remote places.
Although
the merits of oils and gases look fruitful and even unignorable in most cases, it seems to me that the destruction
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will bring forth is not worthwhile after considering the holistic effect on the health of our nature.
Last
but not the least, I strongly feel that if it ever has to go down in the history with good senses, it would only be possible if every human being that consumes
this
natural resource hereafter should have a cautiously optimistic mindset before using it irresponsibly.
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