The number of indigenous tribes living traditional lives in the world’s rainforests is decreasing. Within a few decades the last of these indigenous tribes may have disappeared forever. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to prevent it from happening?

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The aboriginal
tribes
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living in the world’s tropical
rainforests
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population is
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are
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descending. Not more than a few decades, the rest of
native
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the native
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tribes
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may have forever evanesced.
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essay will discuss one of the main problems associated with indigenous groups living in
rainforests
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decreasing number nowadays and suggest a viable solution. The principal problem with the possibility of primeval
tribes
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living in
rainforests
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disappearance in a few decades is deforestation. People, especially
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businesspeople
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often exploit nature for their own
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businesses
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purposes by felling rare
trees
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in important areas, rather than replanting to save the minors and the world.
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,
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causes
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the number of
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apply
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local
tribes
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in
rainforests
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to lessen and
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finally
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may disappear sooner or later within ten years.
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, wood companies need to cut down
trees
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for constructing
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buildings to receive high profits. A possible solution to
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worrying problem is imposing
regulations
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and laws in order to govern
trees
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felling from
businesses
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.
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, by using
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government
regulations
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, the current scenario may have
alleviated
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been alleviated
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.
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, wood
businesses
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may become afraid of laws and
regulations
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,
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perhaps they would not try to log
trees
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to risk their
businesses
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so that those indigenous people in
rainforests
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can still be living. In summary, one of the main problems with the world's jungles is that the number of indigenous
tribes
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practicing traditional lives is dwindling by deforestation and
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can be solved by imposing laws and
regulations
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. It is predicted that more and more entrepreneurs will chop down
trees
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but they may
finally
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be penalized by the government.
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