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DOGS ARE ONE OF THE MOST POPULAR PETS IN THE WORLD, YET MANY WOULD SAY IT IS INAPPROPRIATE TO HAVE THEM IN BUILT UP INNER CITY AREAS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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In the concurrent world,the
debet
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debit
debate
 over
children
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education
 is a hot potato. Many
people
 concur that kids should start their school
education
 at a very small age and others think they should begin after they become younger. Some
people
 concur that it is important to spend their childhood in play. But, I quibble
from
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 them and put forward my idea
education
 is paramount for
children
 from
very
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 early age. I would like to enlist both views and give my opinion in
upcoming
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 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, adequate evidence to obtainable to prove school
education
 change
children
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children's
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behavior
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behaviour
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.
Firstly
, the top-notch concrete factor
is learn
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is learning
is learned
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 new things with
games
.
Children
 are playing
games
 and learn basic things.
For example
, my uncle's child is 4 years old. He is going to preschool and
learn
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 wild animals,
alphabets
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and alphabets
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 by wooden jigsaw.
Secondly
,
children
 learn to play with friends and share their things
to
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with
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 others.
Thus
, it is clear that pre-primary
education
 is good for
child's
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a child's
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 growth.
However
, what is half full for some, may appear
half empty
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 for others.
People
in general
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, in general,
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 tend
think
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education
 is
load
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a load
the load
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 for
children
.
Firstly
,
people
 deem childhood time is for
play
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playing
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games
 not for
load
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loading
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 them
by
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with
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education
.
Children
 should spend most of
time
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their time
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to play
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playing
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 indoor and outdoor
games
 to fit them.
Moreover
,
games
 are important for their better growth.
Secondly
,
children
 should spend most of
time
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their time
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 with their near and dear. They feel comfortable with their parents and grandparents. To conclude, I repeat that there are many strong factors to prove pre-primary
education
is play
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plays
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vital
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a vital
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 role in
child's
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a child's
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 growth.
It's
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Its
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 opposite can be overlooked or controlled.
Although
, I firmly agree with
this
 given statement.
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