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Some people think that learning news from newspapers is the best way. Others, however, say that there are more effective ways of learning news from other media. Discuss both points of view and give your opinions.

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Some are of the opinion that disagreement between adolescents and their
parents
 is an essential part of their improvement while others believe that it is mainly harmful and should never occur within a family. I will analyze both views in the following paragraphs and opine that debates among the family could nourish the education of children significantly. One reason why some argue that conflicts in the family should be avoided is that they may affect the sense of honesty between
parents
 and children.
For example
, if a teenager wants to get a tattoo and asks members of his/her family for their permission, they would most likely deny that request and a discussion will occur.
Consequently
, if the dosage of the debate could not be maintained, the youngster may feel restricted and, as a nature of being a teenager, he/she would behave rebelliously and get the tattoo without his/her family's approval.
As a result
 of that, reliance among the family would get affected negatively.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is crucial for teenagers to have different views on particular subjects and they contradict
parents
 from time to time. Because it is the only logical way for them to generate their own characteristics in the future. In detail, when children conflict with their
parents
, they find ways to create their individual perceptions, and
thus
, challenges that are forthcoming in the future would be easier to handle for them. Eventually, these adolescents would succeed in both their academic and occupational lives,
hence
, end up being outstanding adults later on.  In conclusion,
although
 conflicts within the family may frighten some people as it would kill the sense of honesty among members, I strongly support these disagreements as it would benefit the development of a teenager.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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