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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some electronic devices,
such
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 computers and mobile phones are widely used in
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society.
However
, whether overuse of these devices will have
negative
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a negative
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 effect on young people’s literacy
skills
 remains a controversial issue. I agree with
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 that these young people may lose some of these
skills
 if they
use
 these things improperly.
Firstly
, it is obvious that being addicted
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 phones and computers for casual chatting is time-consuming, which results in less time for reading. Some young addicts spend hours chatting with their friends, which takes up their reading time and gradually leads to
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 loss of interest in reading.
Then
 their reading
skills
 will be degraded.
Moreover
, another negative effect is on writing
skills
. As some young people have become used to a kind of lazy language which consists of inaccurate spelling and wrong grammar, they might
use
this
 casual-communication-based language for formal writing unconsciously.
As a result
, their writing appears unacceptable and unprofessional in many formal settings. Of course, for those who know how to take advantage of these kinds of communication tools, there might be fewer negative effects. Some young users smartly
use
 the devices to work with their teams on their school projects. During the
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 they share and discuss useful reading materials for their essays or proofread one another’s writings. The communication tools
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this
 case can contribute to better literacy
skills
. In sum, if computers and mobile phones are frequently used for activities like chatting, it is possible that the overuse will adversely affect young people’s reading and writing
skills
.
On the other hand
, the proper
use
 of these communication tools may present a positive effect.
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