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Globalisation is postive for economics but its negative sides should not be ingnored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Detrimental impacts of globalisation need to be taken into account while considering financial growth boosted by worldwide
trade
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. Intercontinental business and travel have lifted up gross domestic product in a number of developing
countries
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 but it has harmful effects on the local ecosphere of the region. I completely agree with the statement and
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 paragraphs. Due to open border business and unrestricted travel across the globe,there is a multifold increase in trading from one part of the world to another which raises the financial status of the exporting
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.Worldwide tourism is giving rise to hotel and aviation industries and related businesses.
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 developments increase the local employment rate and the overall monetary status of the community. Governments of those
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 are getting revenue from direct taxes as well as indirect funds in the form of investment from multinational companies.
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countries
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 getting economic gains from global
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, they face issues related to development, like stress on local municipalities for providing water and infrastructure.
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, travellers' behaviours cause pollution and harm to local flora and fauna.
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, due to the seasonal nature of the business large number of manpower get involved in the tourism industry in peak season, so ignoring their local farming and traditional work.
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, there will be competition for available resources which will raise prices for housing and other commodities.
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, progress has an adverse effect on local ecology and micro-structure which was not ready for
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 a big influx. Undoubtedly global
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 improves the financial capacity of the receptive
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 but it brings with it a number of unwilling consequences. so before opening gates for the intercontinental ,
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 local government should consider all those factors in depth.Will go a hundred per cent with the aforementioned statement which indicates the financial as well as debilitating effects of world
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