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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Many
people
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 believe that the motives for acquiring other
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 despite
of
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mother
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 should be for enhancing jobs from abroad nations or going vacations to foreign countries.
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, some individuals claim that there might be other arguments to learn a foreign
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. From my point of view, I
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 agree with
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 statement as
people
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 tend to study foreign
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 not only for chasing jobs and going trips but
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 for developing themselves as a skill of human beings. It could be denied that knowing
mother
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language
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 of the country where ones have to work is one of the fundamental skills for occupation.
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 would help a lot in migrated workers’ communication with team members and labouring processes.
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, it could create comfortable workplaces for guest workers. In terms of
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, understanding the national
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 of the desired country to visit would give full quintessence of a trip.The traveller knows all the signs and signals which are written in
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 mother
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, so he/she could go around the place like his/her motherland.
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 being multilingual helps a lot in aspects of working and
traveling
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, those are not the only reasons to learn a foreign
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.Some
people
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 study different
languages
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 just for motivating themselves and their brains’ health.Acquiring various
languages
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 makes
people
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’s brains to be more active and
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enhance
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 memorizing skills.
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,
people
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 who can communicate
with
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 more than one
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 have less risk for
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Alzheimer's
 disease and dementia when they get older. Some
people
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also
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 study other
languages
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 because of being
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 international
fan
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. They want to get
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 with their admired actors and singers
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 the same
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 which could
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 their connections to be stronger. In conclusion, being a multilingual person has a lot of benefits for our lives.
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,
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 for learning new
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 should not be limited. We can use our cognitive skills for any
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 that we want to apply and
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 will make us
to
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be knowledgeable persons.
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