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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
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During our
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life
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,
people
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 face a
lot
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 of difficult challenges and have to make important decisions out of those. There are some
people
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 who believe that it is beneficial to continue doing the same things and avoid changes,
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 others think that bringing
change
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 in their lifestyle is always a good thing.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and a conclusion
thereafter
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. On
one
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 hand, there are certain
people
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, who feel like doing the same things for the rest of their lives.
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, they think bringing
change
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 to their working style will affect their career.
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, a plumber feels like doing the same job for eternity because for him to
change
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 his career path it will take a
lot
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 of time to get comfortable with a new job.
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,
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 his new and old career options, and wastes a
lot
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 of time and money. Had he been in the previous profession, he could have earned a
lot
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that
change
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 is always good and positive,
one
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 should bring a few changes in their working and living lifestyle.
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, to survive in today's world,
one
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 should keep on learning new and new things. You don't know what can be useful in future.
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,
people
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 working in an IT company cannot restrict themself by doing the same thing again and again, to reach a higher level or to get an increment
one
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 has to think and do it out of the box.
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, leading a healthy, wealthy, and knowledge-driven
life
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. To summarize, in my opinion, bringing
change
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 in your day-to-day
life
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 is important to sustain nowadays.
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People
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those
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who want to grow more in their
life
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,
change
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 is important and good for them. I believe,
change
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 is good and
one
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 must welcome a few changes in their
living
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apply
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lifestyle.
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Your opinion

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