Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.(

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In
this
day and age, reducing the time spent on commuting has sparked a heated debate. Some are of the opinion that turning green
parks
of
city
centres
into apartment complexes is of great assistance, while most people including me ratify the opposite idea. There are three main reasons proving the fact that the drawbacks of
such
alterations outweigh their demerits.
First
of all, the replacement of the verdant urban
parks
with residual buildings takes a heavy toll on the environment of
city
centres
ending up aggravating air pollution.
For example
, carbon dioxide will shrink by green trees of
parks
, so
then
, having central regions destitute of plants will lead to more uninhabitable apartments.
Secondly
, more populated urban zones bring more traffic congestion on a daily basis.
Therefore
inevitable daily gridlocks are a matter of grave concern to business owners when employees' tardiness will be more likely to escalate.
Finally
, the tranquillity of people living in
city
centres
will be disrupted
as a result
of more noise pollution culminating in nervous disorders.
Thus
,
such
workers cannot contain themselves and easily will lose their temper at encounters with clients and
consequently
, the revenue of businesses and the quality and reputations of their goods or services will be more exposed to the risk of becoming tarnished. Admittedly, settling commuters in downtown to save their precious time and energy and expend them in their workplace to discharge their responsibilities is the fact that decision-makers can abandon
this
idea.
For instance
, staff will attend to their workplace with more energy and patience to deal with massive undertakings efficiently and make their working environment more productive. Even so, they are more prone to suffer from stress and anxiety due to the fact that they will be deprived of urban vegetation. Sometimes going for a walk to retain your composure can help the working ambient be more refreshed far from tensions. To conclude, I concede that the monotonous commuting is tedious and taxing to exercise every day and constructing houses in the central part of towns can ameliorate
this
condition to some extent. Despite that, I am convinced of the merits of travelling from suburbs to
city
centres
rather than inflicting irreversible damage on the urban greeneries as same green
parks
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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