Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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There is no denying the fact that all the

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at university have their importance.

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it is a commonly held belief that learning additional

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besides

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the main

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assists them [a]to get extra information, there is

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an argument that opposes

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idea.

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essay will analyze

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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On

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hand, some

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desire to study extra

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besides

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their main

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to expand their knowledge and to get experience to find a better job after graduation.

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, they believe that some

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are related to their main

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, which helps them to understand the

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deeper[b], and to gain a high mark.

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, a medical engineer who studies medical devices needs to study anatomy to[c] fix

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equipment.

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students

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assume that to get good marks in the main

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students

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[d] need to concentrate all the[e] time on them. It is

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possible to say that [f]various and unnecessary

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[g], guide

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to distraction[h] and make them feel bored.

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, it may lead them to not pass the[i] essential

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, if someone studies geography, and

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is forced to study the English language as a side course[j] may make them hate the semester or even not carry on[k] it.[l] In conclusion, there are no easy answers to

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question. On balance,

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, I tend to believe that

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' desires and levels[m] vary among themselves. So all the universities should give the

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an option to choose additional

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, which they like and are appropriate with [n]them.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Provide more seamless transitions between ideas to enhance flow. While the structure is clear, some paragraphs could be better connected with transitional words and phrases.

Task Achievement

Clarify and expand on explanations related to how additional subjects are important. While your examples are relevant, they could be further developed for stronger support of your points.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a singular, clear focus and that examples directly relate back to supporting the main idea within that paragraph.

Task Achievement

Your essay provides a balanced discussion of both views, offering thoughtful consideration to each side of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

You have clearly structured your essay with a strong introduction and conclusion, which effectively summarize your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your personal standpoint is well explained in the conclusion and ties back to the discussion in the body paragraphs.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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