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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Health
care
 is one of the most important things to our body.
This
 is the reason why many
people
 want to take
care
 of their health. Some
people
 suggest that society has to
care
 for more and more elderly
people
. Certainly, I will explain how
people
 in society managed to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly
people
 today. From my point of view, Elderly
people
 are important
people
 for the child. If a child when young was taken
care
 of with love and humility by elderly
people
 in the family
such
 as parents and grandparents,
Children
 have a good relationship with elderly
people
 and wish them to have longevity to be family as long as possible. for longevity,
children
 should manage the time to take
care
 of elderly
people
. In order to take
care
 of old
people
 in the family,
children
 should not work or learn every day. On holiday,
Children
 should spend time with older family by travel to natural places because they can breathe a good air exist from pollution.
For example
, Rigi mountain, near Luzern city, is a good place to relax and be romantic with scenic views of the glacier and lake.
Moreover
,
Children
 can take
care
 of shopping for favourite foods or drinks that elderly
people
 feel are superb to make them happy.
For example
, Chinese old peoples prefer to drink tea.
Moreover
,
Children
 with whom elderly
people
 live in rural areas but you work in the city.
Children
 can contact elderly
people
 in the family to send
care
. In conclusion, I could not agree more that society should be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly
people
 today.
Accordingly
, there are various methods to take
care
 of elderly
people
 in families to improve their health
care
 for longevity as I explain in another paragraph.
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