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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Nowadays,
Education
 should be accessible to
people
 of all economic backgrounds. All levels of
education
, from primary school to tertiary
education
, many
people
 think that educational conditions should be free for all the
people
 with any economic situation, I agree with
this
 topic that everyone should be in the same position and governments can adopt a rule that the
education
 is free for all the
people
,
this
 essay will check
this
 matter. On the one hand, we can see many
people
 that do not have any conditions like other
people
 and in fact, they can not reach their aims
also
this
 is very unfair that just some
people
 that have good welfare can use
education
,
furthermore
, governments should delete
this
 gap among different
people
also
 lawmakers should support of
people
 that are under the economic pressure,
otherwise
, poor
people
 can not have any achievements,
however
, they can be talented but without governments help they will likely go toward poverty and they do not have any opportunity for learning,
for example
, in my country, there are many children that they do not have any
education
 and they have to work in the street.
In contrast
, for the solution we can witness in different countries that amenities facility it is not divided correctly and one part of
people
 are really rich and another part of folks will suffer from ,poverty
this
 is not fair,
thus
, leaders should have precise observe on poor
people
 and support them for
education
 and to do a serious of measures that poor
people
 can use welfare without money or with the lowest cost,
for instance
, nowadays parents should spend a lot of money for different levels of
education
such
 as primary and secondary and even for university and many
people
 can not provide that and have to work very much and do not have any time for the entertainment.   In conclusion, I want to accept
this
 issue that all the
people
 should receive the same service in the society and some the
people
 should be under cover of the government and use of service the form free.
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