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A tendency that the news reported in the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than the positive developments is harmful to both the individual and the society. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a saying that more and more reports concentrate on figuring out the negative features of a social issue
instead
 of spreading the positive image over the
last
 decade, which causes damage to the social and the citizens in it. In
this
 essay,
l
 am going to explain why
l
 approve of
such
 a phenomenon but disagree with
this
 bad result.
To begin
 with, at the heart of
this
 matter is that a decreasing number of misbehaviours,
such
 as crime, highlights the existence of
this
 kind of negative report since the digital media prefer to dig into the outstanding side of a special affair.
In other words
, the pessimistic aspect tends to be paid attention to by the masses.
For instance
, according to a survey, American seems to be more interested in the scandals of their president compared to watching his daily official activities on TV.
Moreover
, with the progress of national security and economics, it is common to have an initial expectation for residents to witness something fantastic happening, resulting in a situation that they may look to be not surprised when they notice an expected outcome, which is far away from the goal of the media.
However
,
l
 firmly believe that both individuals and nations will not be the victims of
such
 a condition. On the one hand, the efficiency of governments will be enhanced obviously under public supervision after some bad news were reported.
For example
, some Chinese official employees were too lazy to help inhabitants to solve the problems in the past, but they had corrected
this
 type of misconduct when they are aware of the criticism from people. In conclusion,
although
 people always are into searching for a negative side of an issue,
l
 still argue that it will bring benefits to improve the current situation because of the social supervision brought by
such
 a report.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sensationalism
  • desensitization
  • skewed perception
  • mental health
  • culture of fear
  • paranoia
  • mistrust
  • positive reinforcement
  • awareness
  • emergencies
  • issues
  • anxiety
  • stress
  • media bias
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