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Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better

#week #birthday #friends #restaurant #success #food #service #atmosphere #improvements
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my gratitude to you and your team, for providing
an
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exceptional service
last
 week at your
restraunt
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restaurant
. I was there to celebrate my birthday
along with
 some friends, and the
food
 was just
mind blowing
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 and everybody loved every
food
 item. kudos! to the kitchen staff for
such
 fast service and great presentation of the
food
.
Moreover
, The ambience of the
restraunt
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restaurant
 was aligning perfectly with the occasion and created a great vibe to enjoy
for
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our group. The live singer which you guys have is just topnotch, he went above and beyond to fulfil our song requests and was kind enough to sing
birthday
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 song for me. All these things just made my day way better and
i
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 felt extremely overwhelmed by the hospitality provided. The only suggestion from us will be ,
consider
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 opening up a patio
dine
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dine-in
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in
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which can allow people to experience your guys's
food
 and services
along with
 the beautiful weather. The summer season with the outside place can become an asset for your business and attract more guests. I will be
recomending
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recommending
 you guys to all my friends and family and would like to thank you again for
this
 amazing experience at your
restraunt
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restaurant
. Yours Truly, Pranav Dhawan
Submitted by pranav.dhawan28 on

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grammar
Overall, this letter is thorough and well-written, responding to all aspects of the task. However, there are a few grammatical errors, such as 'restraunt' instead of 'restaurant', and issues with capitalization, like 'i' instead of 'I'. Pay close attention to these details to improve your letter further.
structure
Try breaking longer sentences into shorter ones for better readability. For example, the sentence starting with 'The live singer...' could have been split into two.
tone
The tone is appropriate and polite, suitable for a formal letter to a restaurant.
task completion
The letter successfully covers all the points mentioned in the task: food and service, atmosphere, and suggestions for improvement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exceptional service
  • culinary delights
  • intriguing ambiance
  • meticulous attention
  • flavorful concoctions
  • impeccable presentation
  • charming decor
  • ambient music
  • constructive feedback
  • vegetarian options
  • seating arrangement
  • heartfelt appreciation
  • wholeheartedly recommend
  • return visit
  • enhance the experience
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