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Working is taking a more important role in people's lives. Why are people working so much? Do you think this trend is good or bad?

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Work
 is arguably getting a higher and higher priority in most
people
's lives than a few decades ago, in terms of daily working
hours
 and average retirement age. We are digging into the reasons for
this
 phenomenon in
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, inflation brings immense pressure
to
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people
. After a prolonged period of unrestricted printing of money, the price of virtually everything needed in our daily life,
such
 as food and fuel, is on a long march.
This
 leads to a horrendous situation
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 the lower-income groups and they have no choice but to
work
 longer
hours
 or retire later to meet
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 ends. Even worse is the spike in accommodation costs. The unlimited supply of money triggers a tremendous boom in the housing market and
people
 who want to own their homes have to
work
 their tails off to save money for a down payment. The high worth of housing triggers the rent to go up, and the skyrocketing housing prices and rents
then
 form a vicious cycle.
Consequently
, both the homeowners and renters need to pay more, and at the end of the day, they need to
work
 harder to make up for the shortfall.
Furthermore
, globalization has taken the competition to an utterly different level. In the past, jobs were protected pretty well by labour unions. Today, they can be taken by lower-cost countries and the public is well aware of that.
As a result
, they take courses in their leisure time to improve their skill level. We can say that
this
 is a kind of
work
 in a broad sense too. Extremely high youth unemployment rates
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 another by-product of globalisation.
For example
, it can be as high as 40% in Europe. With their children jobless, parents have no choice but to extend their retirement. In my opinion, longer working
hours
 are definitely not desirable. It makes
people
 exhausted and reduces the time they have for family life. In some countries,
for
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 China,
people
 consider long working
hours
 to be a reason for the reluctance to have babies. To conclude, a raft of economic reasons are the causes of
work
 being more important to
people
 in terms of
hours
.
Although
this
 is treated as detrimental to personal psychological health, we see no immediate solution to
this
 phenomenon.
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