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Working is taking a more important role in people's lives. Why are people working so much? Do you think this trend is good or bad?

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 is arguably getting a higher and higher priority in most
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's lives than a few decades ago, in terms of daily working
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 and average retirement age. We are digging into the reasons for
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 phenomenon in
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 and foremost, inflation brings immense pressure
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people
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. After a prolonged period of unrestricted printing of money, the price of virtually everything needed in our daily life,
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 as food and fuel, is on a long march.
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 leads to a horrendous situation
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 the lower-income groups and they have no choice but to
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 longer
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 or retire later to meet
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 ends. Even worse is the spike in accommodation costs. The unlimited supply of money triggers a tremendous boom in the housing market and
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 who want to own their homes have to
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 their tails off to save money for a down payment. The high worth of housing triggers the rent to go up, and the skyrocketing housing prices and rents
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 form a vicious cycle.
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, both the homeowners and renters need to pay more, and at the end of the day, they need to
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 harder to make up for the shortfall.
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, globalization has taken the competition to an utterly different level. In the past, jobs were protected pretty well by labour unions. Today, they can be taken by lower-cost countries and the public is well aware of that.
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, they take courses in their leisure time to improve their skill level. We can say that
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 is a kind of
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 in a broad sense too. Extremely high youth unemployment rates
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 another by-product of globalisation.
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, it can be as high as 40% in Europe. With their children jobless, parents have no choice but to extend their retirement. In my opinion, longer working
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 are definitely not desirable. It makes
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 exhausted and reduces the time they have for family life. In some countries,
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 China,
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 consider long working
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 to be a reason for the reluctance to have babies. To conclude, a raft of economic reasons are the causes of
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 being more important to
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 in terms of
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.
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 is treated as detrimental to personal psychological health, we see no immediate solution to
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 phenomenon.
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