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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara deserts or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, tourism is so popular that a lot of
tourists
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 have already
got
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 bored by the mainstream
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countries
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 tourist spots and want something new. Some of them now turn to places that are traditionally less popular
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 as Africa and
Antarticar
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Antarctica
.
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 phenomenon brings advantages and disadvantages as well. In
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essay
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 I will come
accross
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across
 them one by one. To the
tourists
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 themselves, travelling to these
countries
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 obviously can bring them new and fresh experiences, at least they do not need to visit the same old places once again.
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, an old colleague of mine went to Kenya
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 year for a safari. He posted pictures of wild lions and zebras on his social media account, albeit the pictures are taken from far away and very small. It is like he has gathered another feather on his cap and trying to show off. The spill-over of
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 to these poorer nations
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 help their economies much. More often than not, these
countries
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 with great tourism resources, like Kenya mentioned above, do not have sophisticated industries and are weak in export ability. With the influx of foreign
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, the catering and transport sectors of these
countries
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 can provide more jobs to the poor public.
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, the spreading out of
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 is not free from hazards. The most concerning one
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 perhaps pollution. The developing
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which
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 these
tourists
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 flock
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usually do not have strong enforcement ability on environmental protection laws.
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, waste material is left everywhere. It is
exempified
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exemplified
 by restaurants which bribe local officials to keep a blind eye on their pumping sewage into rivers and lakes. In conclusion, the spillover of
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 from traditional tourist spots in developed
countries
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 to new locations creates exciting opportunities for those developing
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however
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 presents challenges to protect the scenic environment there. It seems to me that time and wisdom will be required to tackle
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 dilemma.
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