Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara deserts or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, tourism is so popular that a lot of
tourists
have already
got
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bored by the mainstream
countries
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tourist spots and want something new. Some of them now turn to places that are traditionally less popular
such
as Africa and
Antarticar
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Antarctica
.
This
phenomenon brings advantages and disadvantages as well. In
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I will come
accross
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across
them one by one. To the
tourists
themselves, travelling to these
countries
obviously can bring them new and fresh experiences, at least they do not need to visit the same old places once again.
For example
, an old colleague of mine went to Kenya
last
year for a safari. He posted pictures of wild lions and zebras on his social media account, albeit the pictures are taken from far away and very small. It is like he has gathered another feather on his cap and trying to show off. The spill-over of
tourists
to these poorer nations
do
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help their economies much. More often than not, these
countries
with great tourism resources, like Kenya mentioned above, do not have sophisticated industries and are weak in export ability. With the influx of foreign
tourists
, the catering and transport sectors of these
countries
can provide more jobs to the poor public.
On the other hand
, the spreading out of
tourists
is not free from hazards. The most concerning one
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perhaps pollution. The developing
countries
which
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these
tourists
flock
to
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usually do not have strong enforcement ability on environmental protection laws.
As a result
, waste material is left everywhere. It is
exempified
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exemplified
by restaurants which bribe local officials to keep a blind eye on their pumping sewage into rivers and lakes. In conclusion, the spillover of
tourists
from traditional tourist spots in developed
countries
to new locations creates exciting opportunities for those developing
countries
,
however
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it
also
presents challenges to protect the scenic environment there. It seems to me that time and wisdom will be required to tackle
this
dilemma.
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