Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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some debates over whether

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spent on wildlife protection could be better spent on helping

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. Personally, I believe that the protection of wild

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is extremely important and that countries need to invest more

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in preserving their native animal species.

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do because they are passionate about saving and helping

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spent on these causes is from charity organisations which rely mostly on donations.

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believe that humans are the superior race on planet Earth, others, including myself, feel that all living beings, human and animal, have equal rights to live in peace, and

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and their habitats is extremely important. Human activity is no doubt the main cause of most problems wild

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face. The human race has continued to destroy the planet and the natural habitats of wild

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should be responsible for protecting them so that they can live wild and free, as is their natural state. In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is essential for the health of the planet to maintain a diverse range of

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and wildlife within all

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, in order to restore a healthy balance to the planet’s natural environments.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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