Many agricultural lands are being converted into commercial centres. How does this affect the environment and the people’s lifestyle? Discuss this situation and provide suggestions to address these issues. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

It is undeniable that agriculture is an important part of the country. But many farming lands are being replaced
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public
centers
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like
shopping
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mall
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and
resedential
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residential
buildings. In
this
essay, I am going to examine some issues
that
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related to the environment and the people's
lifestyle
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and the consequences of
this
notion in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, many lands are being substituted
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commerical
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commercial
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centers
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because people are crowded in
a
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major cities as they need spaces for their living. The more people are denser in
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large
cities
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, the more building they need for their lives. Overpopulation is
the
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one of the causes of reducing the
lands
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.
Secondly
, it can affect seriously not only
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the environment and
also
the animals. Many animals are extinct every year because of the depletion of natural resources and the detrimental
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the
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ecosystem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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