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In Recent Years Many Local Shops Have Closed Because Customers Travel To Large Shopping Malls

#years #shops #customers #travel #malls
Not many
people
 in the modern city find
products
 in
a small
Correct the article-noun agreement
a small shop
small shops
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shops
.Nowadays,The consumers
purchase
products
 from a big company
instead
 of local
shops
this
 can cause local
shops
 have been closed. The following paragraphs will be discussed the cause of
this
problem
 and recommend some practical solutions to solve the
problem
. It is undeniable that the consumption of consumers has changed.Consumers always go to numerous places for shopping than local places which can cause
this
 small place will be closed.There are several reasons why
this
problem
 happens,
Firstly
 Local
shops
 do have not many
products
 to select
.
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from.
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For instance
,some
products
 in the shop have only one band to distribute customers do not have an alternative choice to
purchase
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purchasing
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.
Next
,
Products
 from the local
shops
 are at risk to be
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of a
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a
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of
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 negative quality which is some
products
 can not stay for a long time they need to be rapidly sold to the customers. ,
Lastly
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 The large shopping malls open nearby local
shops
 that can persuade
people
 to come and
purchase
 their
products
. To solve
this
problem
.there are several things the governments should do. The authorities should do a campaign to persuade
people
 to
purchase
 something in local
shops
.
For example
, they should do advertisements to show
products
 in
a local
Correct the article-noun agreement
local shops
a local shop
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shops
 and show how different and unique
products
people
 will gain went shopping there. The most interesting point is that government should move the large shopping malls to another area
such
 as in the middle of the city not close to local areas. To sum up, to tackle the
problem
 governments should help the local shop to do the campaign and do advertisements to persuade
people
 to
purchase
 local
shops
 than large shopping malls
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