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In Recent Years Many Local Shops Have Closed Because Customers Travel To Large Shopping Malls

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Not many
people
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 in the modern city find
products
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 in
a small
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a small shop
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shops
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.Nowadays,The consumers
purchase
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products
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 from a big company
instead
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 of local
shops
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this
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 can cause local
shops
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 have been closed. The following paragraphs will be discussed the cause of
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problem
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 and recommend some practical solutions to solve the
problem
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. It is undeniable that the consumption of consumers has changed.Consumers always go to numerous places for shopping than local places which can cause
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 small place will be closed.There are several reasons why
this
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problem
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 happens,
Firstly
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 Local
shops
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 do have not many
products
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 to select
.
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from.
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,some
products
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 in the shop have only one band to distribute customers do not have an alternative choice to
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purchase
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purchasing
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.
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,
Products
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 from the local
shops
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 are at risk to be
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of a
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a
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of
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 negative quality which is some
products
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 can not stay for a long time they need to be rapidly sold to the customers. ,
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Lastly
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 The large shopping malls open nearby local
shops
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 that can persuade
people
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 to come and
purchase
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 their
products
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. To solve
this
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problem
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.there are several things the governments should do. The authorities should do a campaign to persuade
people
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 to
purchase
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 something in local
shops
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.
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, they should do advertisements to show
products
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 in
a local
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local shops
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shops
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 and show how different and unique
products
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people
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 will gain went shopping there. The most interesting point is that government should move the large shopping malls to another area
such
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 as in the middle of the city not close to local areas. To sum up, to tackle the
problem
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 governments should help the local shop to do the campaign and do advertisements to persuade
people
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 to
purchase
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 local
shops
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 than large shopping malls
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