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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this ? what other time in history would be interesting to live in?

#people #time #history
Some individuals say that in order to stay in
history
 like an important person, now is the best
time
 to do it. In my opinion, human beings have
a
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plenty of
opportunity
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 for being well-known. In
this
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what
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 would be interesting to live in
other
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history
time
. Nowadays, in the world, there are a lot of stages in order to be
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famous
famouse
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famous
.
For example
,
major
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 part of young
people
use
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 the platforms
such
 as Tik Tok, Youtube or Instagram,
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 that they can do something special that
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 them fame. In
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previous
previouse
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previous
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, popular leaders
such
 as Amir Temur or Napoleon,
they
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had to win some wars to be
mantioned
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mentioned
 in
history
.
Nevertheless
, there is the most popular thing is images
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 the internet called Mems, which are created by a number of
people
 in the world. I suppose that they are
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 our significant parts of life by means of making those Mems.
Thus
, in the present days, the internet spreads all information so quickly and anybody is capable of being popular
easly
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easily
.
However
,
anciaent
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ancient
time
 is known
like
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gold
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time
 of discovering something new.
The
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 period when was lived Columb the major parts of the world were unfamiliar and covered. The interesting
time
 for being in the past would be there,
people
 could be like
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heroes
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 when they opened new lands. In conclusion,
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certain
 part of
people
say
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 that today,
one
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 of the
lackiest
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luckiest
moment
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moments
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to
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stay in
history
. In my view, I agree with that statement due to the fact that the internet is
major
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 resource in present days by virtue of it many
people
 can earn
the
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fame without difficulties.
In addition
, the most interesting period of
time
 in
history
 is
gold
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time
 of
discovering
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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