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A friend who is planning to visit you has asked you to describe the most interesting and enjoyable things to do in the community where you currently live. Write an email to your friend, telling them about these things. In your email, As Say what these things are Say why they are interesting/enjoyable Suggest what you can do together

#friend #visit #community #email
Dear Jim, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
 letter to describe the beautiful and amazing things
of
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my
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 town where I am living. I was over the moon when I heard that you
are
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 coming to visit my place. In Mississauga, there are plenty of tourist spots to visit. First of all, the Square One shopping mall which is very famous in My hometown. We
are go
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 there for shopping. After that,you can try different varieties of cuisines. As
,
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this
 is your first time in
this
 city there are several different Museums which you can enjoy. I am sure the ECO museum will be the only
one
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thing you will enjoy more because there are many interesting activities.
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,
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 the escape room and horror rooms are very fascinating. There is
very
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 popular conservation park just 2
kms
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km
 from my home. It is a tourist attraction and
have
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every
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 lone trail to walk and see the beauty of nature. I am waiting for you to come as
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 I have already planned the schedule of days. I hope to meet you soon Yours sincerely, Sin
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clearer paragraphs to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph expresses a single coherent idea.
task achievement
Ensure that your letter completely addresses each part of the task prompt.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and inviting tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The closing is personal and warm, enhancing the effectiveness of the communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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