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Wild animals have no use in the 21 century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with question

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There has been a controversy about whether we should protect wild
animals
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 in the 21 century. I think we definitely need to continue protecting wild
animals
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, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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,
humans
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 are a member of the earth; protecting other
creatures
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 is a request of human civilization. The species on the planet have developed for billions of years; during
this
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 time, there are some
creatures
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 have been extinct due to natural disasters,
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 as climate change or earthquakes.
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, before the advent of
humans
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, no
creatures
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 had the power to extinct other living beings drastically. People's weapons, like, guns
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apply
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overshadowed
animals
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' teeth, furs, and claws. According to
this
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 huge advantage of
humans
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, we have become dominant on
this
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 planet; we have controlled all the important resources,
such
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 as water and land.
On the contrary
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, we have become the biggest blight on the earth as well, because we bring all sorts of destruction and pollution.
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, protecting
animals
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 is in line with modern civilization.
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, protecting other lives is protecting ourselves.
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, nature is a cyclic system, if we exterminate some
creatures
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,
then
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this
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 system is bound to collapse;
in addition
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, based on the current level of
humans
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, we still need to rely on nature.
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, if we ruin the environment,
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and kill
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 other
animals
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, we are actually eradicating ourselves. Regarding those farm
animals
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, e.g., pigs or chickens, we treat them in a civilized way as well rather than killing them ruthlessly. In conclusion, we need to protect wild
animals
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 inarguably. Regarding those endangered
animals
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, we should use our power to help them.
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