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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe the most effective reform to mitigate environmental issues is to increase
fuel
 prices for
vehicles
. In my opinion, while
this
 is necessary for the short-term, education acts as the priority solution. Those who advocate the need for the increased cost of
fuel
 often point to the immediate effect on the
environment
.
People
 are often driven by costs so more expensive
fuel
 prices can discourage them to commute with their
vehicles
, creating the demand for public transport.
For example
, Vietnam has been experiencing a rise in
fuel
 for the past 3 months, and the locals are making the transition from private cars and motorbikes to bicycles and electric buses.
Accordingly
,
this
 has resulted in a cleaner atmosphere and fresher air in big cities like Hanoi and Saigon.
However
, officials doubt the effectiveness of
this
 approach because the rise has caused a lot of frustration for the citizenry.
This
 is why I consider
fuel
 increases can help improve the worsening
environment
 for only a short period of time. A better solution calls for the urge to educate
people
 about the long-term impact. Human activities have long been blamed for damaging the
environment
 and there are many factors contributing to
this
. Toxic gases released by
vehicles
 only account for part of the cause, while large-scale industries, deforestation and unsustainable farming are
also
 the catalysts. If
people
 were aware of the consequences that they made while operating in their fields, the
environment
 would not suffer as it does now. Maybe
instead
 of cutting down trees for residential housing, city planners can be more thoughtful by creating more green spaces for residents to live close to nature. In conclusion, increased prices for
fuel
 can somewhat prevent
people
 from using their
vehicles
 for a limited time, but we need to work towards long-term reform. I think once we educate
people
 to be more responsible in their areas, we already help the
environment
 not to be seriously harmed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive use
  • encouraging public transportation
  • sustainable energy sources
  • hydrogen-powered vehicles
  • generate additional revenue
  • environmentally friendly projects
  • disproportionately affects
  • lower-income individuals
  • accessible public transportation options
  • sudden hikes
  • inflation
  • social inequality
  • renewable energy
  • promoting carpooling
  • equitable
  • addressing environmental issues
  • punitive measures
  • sustainable lifestyle
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