Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the ever-connected modern world, some
people
believe that we are more dependent on each other while others may argue that people
rely on other people
less than before and have become more independent. In my point of view, I totally agree with the latter stance, and supporting reasons will be discussed in forthcoming
paragraphs.
On the one hand, there are a few reasons for arguing that Correct article usage
the forthcoming
people
are more dependent on each other. To begin
with, there are a number of difficulties in the present day
life Add a hyphen
present-day
such
as inflation and high competition in working
industry. As for Correct article usage
the working
the
inflation, financial assistance Correct article usage
apply
are
needed by young Change the verb form
is
people
from their parents due to increasing
in living costs. Replace the word
increase
Moreover
, due to the fact that having connections is significant nowadays, people
are encouraged to keep in touch with other people
in order to increase chance
Add an article
the chance
for
getting employed in big companies.
Change preposition
of
On the other hand
, I believe that many people
become more independent because of several factors. The main factor is advancement in technologies which has huge impacts to
our society. Whereas Change preposition
on
people
had more interaction between
each other in the past, they have become more independent since Change preposition
with
smartphone
and Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
internet
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the internet
are existed
. Change to the active voice
exist
have existed
For example
, some young people
do not have many friends since they are addicted to playing mobile
Change preposition
on mobile
phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Furthermore
, due to covid situation, people
need to do isolation
leading to less dependency Replace the word
isolated
between
Change preposition
among
people
In conclusion, although
people
are still dependent on other people
in some ways , they are less rely
on others Replace the word
reliant
for
several senses in terms of new Change preposition
in
invention
and Fix the agreement mistake
inventions
pandemic
.Fix the agreement mistake
pandemics
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