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Last month you had an overseas holiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: ● Thank them for the holiday and the photos. ● Explain why you didn’t write earlier. ● Invite them to come and stay with you.

Hi Steve and Miles, First of all, thank you for the warm welcome and hospitality during my holiday in Japan! Your house is really nice and the location is very strategic.
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, thank you for the photos you sent. It makes me
reminiscence
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our
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about our
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 trip together. I will hang it up on my wall as a commemorative picture. I am really sorry
,
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 if I have not sent anything to you after I
gone
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 home. I just got too busy, catching up with leftover work from the holiday. Interestingly, I got a job in Papua New Guinea
last
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 week and it took a lot of energy just to travel there. I hope the delayed response, does not make our friendship worsen. If you have any free time next month or
at the end
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 of the year, you can come to Australia and stay at my place. I assure you, everything will be wonderful and I will be the best host in your life! Feel free to let me know your plan for the year. Kind regards, Chris

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down complex sentences to improve clarity and readability.
task response
Make sure to express your appreciation and thoughts with a little more detail to strengthen the emotional connection.
positive
The letter has a friendly and warm tone, making it very inviting and personal.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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