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Everyone should stay in school until they reach the age of 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, applying
age
 restrictions in the field of
education
 seems undesirable.
In addition
 to these, it looks more inappropriate for school students.
This
 essay will discuss both the merits and demerits of imposing the
age
 limit in the academic context and will provide an overall opinion. Are there myriads of benefits of imposing a limit on the
age
 of students? Certainly, there are. In
this
 way, potential learners get more time to enrich their basic knowledge.
For instance
, if a student spends at least 18 years
then
 it is obvious that he/she can have a better early foundation.
As a result
, the path of the advanced
study
 could be smooth.
Moreover
, with the
age
 restriction of 18, an aspirant for
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higher
study
 could be financially solvent. In
this
 way, he/she can easily maintain the cost of
education
, say tuition fees, stationery materials, and so on.
Thus
, an academician can remove some burdens from the perspective of parents. Despite these arguments, what happens if authority forcefully keeps everyone in school until 18 years? We can
then
 expect a few obvious bad things.
Firstly
, it will break concentration on the part of a school-going kid.
For instance
, if a student read the same things again and again, it will definitely create a feeling of boredom.
Therefore
, it is possible to be ended up
this
 thing with poor exam grades.
Secondly
, the longer beginning period of
education
 will
also
 stretch the rest of the time of the
study
,
for example
, secondary and tertiary levels.
Hence
, the cost of formal
education
 will
accordingly
 increase. In conclusion, it must be said that
age
 restrictions may have some evident advantages,
such
 as a strong foundation, and financial solvency even though it breaks focus from the
study
 as well as escalate the cost of structured levels of
education
. In my opinion, there should be no
age
 limit in the case of academics.
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