Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable.

Nowadays, e-learning has become very popular day by day because of its numerous benefits and facilities. While

on the other hand

, traditional schooling will never deteriorate.

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essay discusses both sides of the argument and

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, I will put forward my perception. To commence with, online training provides various benefits and amenities through applications which are either google meet

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zoom meeting

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youtube live classes or Skype etc.

Firstly

, virtual teaching saves

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time and money as we don't need to go

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to schools

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schools

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need to stay in hostels.

Secondly

this

system furnishes convenience and comfort to students as well as teachers

although

, they can continue at their home itself.

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, due to lockdown officials and

government

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prohibited

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schools to maintain social distancing, at that time most

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the trainers used

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applications to clear

learners

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doubts. Even it is helpful during examinations by clearing concepts through recorded videos. In fact, offline classes are more effective than online as we can learn communication skills and how to develop

a healthy relations

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with classmates and mentors. For

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example, if we take children how they can communicate with other kids, how they can play and enjoy with friends through

web

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. There will be a chance to lack of discipline,

importance

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of social living, cultures everything they miss. In conclusion, Both groups have their logical reasons to support their arguments. Even though web train has

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ability of convenience and

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budget friendly

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facilities, I believe that

face to face

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classes never be replaceable.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

e-Learning
face-to-face education
remote learning
virtual classroom
webinar
digital platform
self-paced learning
interactive learning
course accessibility
academic networking
pedagogy
synchronous/asynchronous sessions
MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
edtech (educational technology)
holistic development
practical skills
collaborative learning
digital divide
curriculum adaptation
technological literacy

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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable.

Fully explain your ideas

In the past, most working people had only one job. However, nowadays, more and more people have more than one job at the same time. What are the reasons for this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?

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some say that children should do unpaid community work, and some say it is not important for their development. How much do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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