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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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People may have thought that
teenagers
 should help
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society in their spare
time
 without any return to gain both personal and social
outcome
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. I disagree with the idea that
teenagers
 must
to
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do
the
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unpaid work, and I believe that it can still be beneficial by doing
other kind
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 of things. On the one hand,
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adolescent
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adolescents
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 should not be asked to do extra
works
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 without
payoff
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. The main reason is that the youth have
right
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 to choose what to do
on
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 their free
time
.
Teenagers
 can spend their extra
time
in
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finding their interests or relaxing.
For instance
, students who are busy
in
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 weekdays might want to use their free
time
 hanging out with friends rather than doing community affairs.
Furthermore
, some youngsters are responsible for
family’s
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 financial support that they have to take a part-
time
 job for houseware and the tuition fee.
On the other hand
, there are other types of
thing
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 that
juvenile
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 can do to benefit both individuals and societies.
Firstly
, they can learn some skills based on their interest.
For instance
, those who enjoy swimming can get a
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life guard
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 certificate, and that’s not only for a sense of
honor
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,
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 but
also
 an ability to rescue drowning people.
Secondly
, students can have an internship in a company to achieve bountiful experiences
,
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and
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 may lower the city’s unemployment rate.
Lastly
, they can choose to take a rest and think more about
future
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, which is important to career development. In conclusion,
teenagers
 should not be taught to help local communities if they have more
time
, and they can gain extra benefits by using their
time
 on finding their interests, having
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internship
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 or just relaxing.
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