Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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People may have thought that
teenagers
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should help
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society in their spare
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without any return to gain both personal and social
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. I disagree with the idea that
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must
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do
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unpaid work, and I believe that it can still be beneficial by doing
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of things. On the one hand,
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adolescent
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adolescents
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should not be asked to do extra
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without
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. The main reason is that the youth have
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to choose what to do
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their free
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.
Teenagers
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can spend their extra
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finding their interests or relaxing.
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, students who are busy
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weekdays might want to use their free
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hanging out with friends rather than doing community affairs.
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, some youngsters are responsible for
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financial support that they have to take a part-
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job for houseware and the tuition fee.
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, there are other types of
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that
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can do to benefit both individuals and societies.
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, they can learn some skills based on their interest.
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, those who enjoy swimming can get a
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life guard
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certificate, and that’s not only for a sense of
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,
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but
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an ability to rescue drowning people.
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, students can have an internship in a company to achieve bountiful experiences
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may lower the city’s unemployment rate.
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, they can choose to take a rest and think more about
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, which is important to career development. In conclusion,
teenagers
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should not be taught to help local communities if they have more
time
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, and they can gain extra benefits by using their
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on finding their interests, having
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an internship
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internship
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or just relaxing.
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