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Today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

#today’s #teenagers #lives #generations
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In the concurrent world, it is undoubtedly true that
teenagers
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 have more stressful lives than the
last
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 generations. Some people concur that
teenagers
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 had more stress
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 previous generations.
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, I quibble with them and put forward my idea that nowadays
teenagers
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 live with more stressful
life
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. I would like to enlist both views and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. To start with, adequate evidence is obtainable to prove the concept of
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 lives more stressful
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.
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, the top-notch concrete factor is a busy lifestyle. A youngster needs to morden clothes, electrical gadgets and many more. When that things are not with them they fill stressed.
Teenagers
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 copy others in their
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 and want to become like them. According to the 'Times Of India ', a survey on the
teenagers
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, when they fill stressed in
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? 85% of
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 point.
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, the rearmost coherent factor to be considered which cannot be neglected is social media. Nowadays everyone is on Facebook and what's up.
Teenagers
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 follow them and take the stress.
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,it is clear that
teenagers
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 have more stressful lives in today's era.
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, what is half full for some,may appear half-empty for others.so the public
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 to different point of view that
teenagers
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 had more stress
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 previous generations.
To begin
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 with,
teenagers
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 passed their most of time in farm work and they had not much time for entertainment. So,they become stressed easily.
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, they
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 uphold that they had no entertainment devices like television, mobile phone, computer or tablet. To conclude, I repeat that there are innumerable strong factors supporting my opinion.
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,I firmly with the given statement.
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