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You share a parking area with several neighbours and have recently started having problems. Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area. In that letter • explaining the problems • suggesting ways to help the situation • proposing a possible meeting You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Neighbours,

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Dear Neighbours, You all know that we have only one shared parking area with a maximum capacity of 20 slots. Recently, we have
many
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 private car owners in our building, so that causes some problems for our residents, who struggle to find an empty place. Some families have two or even more vehicles.
As a result
, other people can not park their cars and they are forced to leave their automobiles far away from our apartment, which is not always safe.
Secondly
, a large number of cars causes traffic problems. It takes a minimum of 15 minutes to drive out of the parking zone in the morning. I think
,
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 we should state that only one parking place is available for one family. If someone has two or more cars, they have to park them somewhere else. I am open
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 other suggestions and invite everyone to discuss
this
 issue. We can all gather together on Friday evening, 8 pm in our lounge zone downstairs. Thank you in advance for your consideration. I hope that together we can solve
this
 problem and make our life more comfortable.
Your
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 sincerely, Anfisa Samedova
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task achievement
While the letter clearly identifies the problems and proposes solutions, adding more specific examples or anecdotes could enhance the reader's understanding and empathy.
coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down longer sentences into shorter ones for better readability and to ensure each paragraph conveys a single idea.
task achievement
The letter comprehensively addresses each of the required points: explaining the problems, suggesting solutions, and proposing a meeting.
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The tone of the letter is polite and constructive, which is suitable for the scenario.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is logically structured, with clear paragraphs for introduction, problem description, solution suggestions, and a call for a meeting.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriate, fostering a sense of community and collaboration among neighbours.
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