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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve green traffic and pollution problems, to what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

The best way to solve
traffic
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 jams and
pollution
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problems
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 is to increase the
price
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 of
petrol
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. I totally disagree with
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 opinion and
then
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 I will give some effective solutions. The main reason why increasing the
price
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 of
petrol
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 cannot solve growing
traffic
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 and
pollution
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problems
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 is because driving a
car
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 is more comfortable than taking public
transportation
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.When
people
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 drive their
car
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, they can have their own space but when
people
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 take public
transportation
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such
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 as the metro or bus, they will not even have their own standing room during the rush hours. Another reason is that driving a
car
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 is more flexible. Bus and metro have their own timetable so if
people
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 want to take them, they must follow their timetable. Normally the waiting time for public
transportation
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 is too long so
people
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 can waste a lot of time on it.
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, I think
people
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 cannot give up driving their own
car
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 because of the increasing
petrol
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price
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.
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, I believe there are other effective ways to solve those
problems
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.
First
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 of all, the
government
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 can provide some benefits to encourage
people
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 to decline the frequency of driving.
For instance
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, the
government
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 can waive the public transport fee, which can encourage
people
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 to take public
transportation
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.
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, the press and
government
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 can make publicity that population
problems
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 can affect our life because of growing
traffic
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. The press can use videos or newspapers to tell
people
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 how carbon dioxide which is produced by growing cars affects the air. In conclusion, I completely believe that increasing the
price
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 of
petrol
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 cannot solve growing
traffic
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 and
pollution
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problems
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.
This
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 is because driving a
car
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 is more comfortable than taking public transport and driving a
car
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 is more flexible. The more effective solutions are that
government
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 provide some benefit for
people
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 who take public
transportation
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 and the press and
government
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 make publicity of how
pollution
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problems
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 affect our life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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