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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development.

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In the contemporary world,
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shopping is a famous activity among
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people
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. Most
people
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 expect to
fulfill
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 their
need
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needs
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 under
a
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 same roof and they are not preferred to purchase
items
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 everywhere in the towns
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tiny
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in tiny
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 shops. There are benefits and drawbacks
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that can
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 be observed during
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 shopping and
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 essay would discuss what are the advantages and disadvantages of
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 aspect. In my opinion,
people
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 advantages when doing the shopping in the large shopping malls than
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 local mini-stores.
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 and foremost, due to the busyness and tight work schedule,
personals
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 have quite limited time
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such
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 activities as shopping. Most of them looking
for
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to
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 complete their task within a
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 attempt.
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, the large
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supermarkets
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super markets
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supermarkets
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 contain
its
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their
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 own car parks with enormous space.
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 to that, they have all the household
items
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,
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clothes
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cloths
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clothes
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 and shoes, grocery
items
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 including fish,
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits,
hardware
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and hardware
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items
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.
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, the dining places will be provided to the
customers
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 to accomplish their tasks.
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, shopping complex owners are able to attract
customers
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towards
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 them.
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,
people
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 are refusing and
reduce
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 to
buy
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buying
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 the necessary
items
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 due to the uncomfortably from small shops,
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 will be an issue for their survival. Because of
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also
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 provide their
suppler
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supplier
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 for the country’s economy as well as it will be difficult to maintain their business,
families
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and families
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.
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, the threats and risks will arise
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 their end.
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, lack of parking inconvenience way of paying,
lack
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and lack
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 of spaces in the shops may direct
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away the
customers
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.
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, sometimes, they may
unable
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 to deal with the cards and online transactions
also
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drives
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 toward the inefficient way of dealing
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unable
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 to pay by
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car
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cars
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card
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, online,
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will drive towards
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 negative way the
customers
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. To conclude, there
are
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is
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 major
advantage
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advantages
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are
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that are
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 able to
deliver
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 to the customer’s end than the disadvantage.
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, the consumers are able to catch
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 bunch of positive matters from the large malls than the small ones. In my purview,
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society will have vast benefits when
comparing
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 to the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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