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Some parents bring their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

#parents #children #toys
There is no doubt that
games
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youths
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 childhood. The question is, dose parents providing
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their
thier
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 kids with
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enormous
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enormus
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enormous
 amount of
games
 have more advantages or disadvantages? I
personly
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believe
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belive
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 that
toys
 are very important but should be in small portions. In the terms of advantages,
toys
 can have a
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positive
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 effect if they were educational
games
.
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 reason given to support
this
 claim is that kids can have fun while learning helpful skills
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 the same time.
In other words
, if the child
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continues
countinues
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continues
 playing these
games
 he or she will be shaped to be a successful member of
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society. Another advantage is that the social skills will be developed
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 a result of sharing
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their
thier
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their
toys
 with other toddlers
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 the same age and making
frienship
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friendship
friendships
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 a
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sense
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 of teamwork and cooperation.
However
, there is a number of
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negative
negtive
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negative
 sides that comes with buying huge amounts of
toys
 .
Firstly
, some parents
uses
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toys
 as
in
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an
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alternative
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alternative
of
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 spending quality
times
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 with
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their
thier
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their
 offsprings, mostly because of
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the
thier
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their
 long hours job and the small amount of sleep. Resulting
to
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 creat a
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distance
distence
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distance
 between them and
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thier
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 children.
Secondly
, a large number of
toys
 can be rather expensive. And kids will tend to get bored
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toys
 after
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 of time. In other terms , waste of money. To conclude,
i
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 think that
games
 should be bought for children but preferably being educational to help
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 a great impact on the
child
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 future success and
also
 to shape their social skills.
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 it should be in moderate
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