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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Introduction
Some people believe that
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 should be dependent and stop importing.
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, supermarkets will sell only locally produced
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.
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this
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 concept is based on achieving
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’ self-fulfilment and empowerment, I disagree with it. I believe that nations should strengthen their bonds with others by exchanging products and
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.
Body paragraph 1
Exchanging
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 between
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 will guarantee variety. As some
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 have the weather which is perfect to cultivate specific crops.
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, other
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' semi-arid climate makes them able to grow rare fruits and vegetables.
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, Egypt has the perfect weather to grow plants like cotton, rice, and wheat.
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, several
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 rely on Egyptian cotton by importing it from Egypt.
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, Egypt can grow crops like coconuts, so it imports them.
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, Asian
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 like Indonesia, Korea, Japan, and China are famously known for seafood.
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, they export it on a large scale in advance with other kinds of
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 which they cannot grow.
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 of
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 exchange of
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 supply, we can find any kind of
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 everywhere.
Body paragraph 2
Some opinions see markets should trade the local goods only. They justify their argument by explaining that exportation and importation tend us to something called globalization.
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,
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 will be affected by the other
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' economical situation.
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, what is happening recently with several
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 after the Russian and Ukraine crisis
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, I disagree with them. I believe that importing and exporting products including nutritional elements among
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 build strong connections between them.
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, having support and backing during necessary.
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, diversifying the options of brands,
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; increasing sales and income.
Conclusion
In conclusion, fulfilled supermarkets that support national goods are a debatable concept. I disagree with it. I would say that
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' political support over the world is coming from building relationships with other
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.
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 of
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 concept, importing and exporting are the strongest strategies to imply the ground of empowering links between different areas of the world.

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