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Some children have a natural ability to grasp foreign languages and for that reason it should not be a mandatory subject in the academic curriculum. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The bar graph depicts the number of
hours
 that
tourists
 from China, America, Turkey and Brazil spent at the
beach
, reading
books
 and visiting places during their vacation in Greece in the year 2019. Overall, it is evident that visiting different places was less prefered by all the
tourists
.
However
, the Chinese and the Americans utilised most of their time in reading
books
, whereas visiting the
beach
 was most popular among the
Turkish
 and the Brazilians. Talking about the Chinese
tourists
, they spent the maximum number of
hours
 reading
books
, while they devoted only 3
hours
 to the
beach
.
On the other hand
, the Brazilian
tourists
' spent one-fourth of their day at the
beach
 while one-sixth of their leisure time was utilised in reading
books
. The people of America spent more time reading ( 5
hours
) compared to
Turkish
 nationals(at 4
hours
).
Further
, the vice-versa was experienced when the Americans spent 4
hours
 at the
beach
 and the
Turkish
 devoted 5
hours
 to reading.
Nevertheless
, people were less interested in visiting places than in the rest of the two leisure activities.
Therefore
, 3
hours
 were spent by the Americans and The
Turkish
, and only one hour and 2
hours
 were spent by the Chinese and the Brazilians respectively.
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