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Some children have a natural ability to grasp foreign languages and for that reason it should not be a mandatory subject in the academic curriculum. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#children #ability #languages #reason #curriculum
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The bar graph depicts the number of
hours
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 that
tourists
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 from China, America, Turkey and Brazil spent at the
beach
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, reading
books
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 and visiting places during their vacation in Greece in the year 2019. Overall, it is evident that visiting different places was less prefered by all the
tourists
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.
However
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, the Chinese and the Americans utilised most of their time in reading
books
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, whereas visiting the
beach
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 was most popular among the
Turkish
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 and the Brazilians. Talking about the Chinese
tourists
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, they spent the maximum number of
hours
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 reading
books
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, while they devoted only 3
hours
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 to the
beach
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.
On the other hand
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, the Brazilian
tourists
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' spent one-fourth of their day at the
beach
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 while one-sixth of their leisure time was utilised in reading
books
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. The people of America spent more time reading ( 5
hours
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) compared to
Turkish
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 nationals(at 4
hours
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).
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, the vice-versa was experienced when the Americans spent 4
hours
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 at the
beach
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 and the
Turkish
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 devoted 5
hours
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 to reading.
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, people were less interested in visiting places than in the rest of the two leisure activities.
Therefore
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, 3
hours
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 were spent by the Americans and The
Turkish
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, and only one hour and 2
hours
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 were spent by the Chinese and the Brazilians respectively.
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