Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
fast-paced world, everyone
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running towards their goal in
life
. But these goals are not fixed at the age of 20, it
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for
that is
from
our
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stages of our
life
, for
some one
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someone
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its
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from their
chilhood
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childhood
for other it will be
at
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teenage. So by
this
some individuals ween that a
child
should
experience
more and more before going to
school
, which will
influence
the
child
furture
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future
further
. There are others who reckon that
experience
as
teenager
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a teenager
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,at
school
have
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great
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influence
the
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future
.In my point of view, I believe the wisdom gained as a
teenager
at
school
will have a great impact
in
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their
future
.
To begin
with, when a
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new born
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,
step
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into
this
world and open
the
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their
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eyes, everything will be new for the
child
.
Moreover
, creativity begins here,by the things he
see
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.
In addition
, the
child
do
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not know,what
are
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all that? Only parents tutor the
child
, everything about the world.
This
knowledge and
experience
gained by the
child
will
influence
the
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their
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his
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future
life
.
For example
,by a recent thesis, it is proved that the
experience
gained by the infant in the initial
stage
after birth, will
influence
their
future
.
On the other hand
,
teenage
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is
the
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one of the
lovely
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stage
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in our
life
we came across. some people
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think
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thing
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think
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that
experience
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experiences
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gained as a
teenager
,at
school
are
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influential .
The teenagers
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are good observers and learners, they observe everything keenly and raise questions regarding that, to clear their doubts.
This
wisdom and curiosity
obatibed
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obtained
as a
teenager
will have a great
influence
in
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on
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their
future
. To
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illustrate
illustarate
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illustrate
,
in
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a recent survey, it
is show
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that most
of
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the
student
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students
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careers are decided in their teenage
stage
itself. To conclude,
experience
as a
child
develop creativity but the teenage
stage
give some time to think and decide our
future
. So
i
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believe
teenage
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the teenage
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stage
influence
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influences
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our
future
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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