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Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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this
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 fast-paced world, everyone
are
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 running towards their goal in
life
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. But these goals are not fixed at the age of 20, it
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 stages of our
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, for
some one
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someone
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its
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 from their
chilhood
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childhood
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at
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a
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 teenage. So by
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 some individuals ween that a
child
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 should
experience
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 more and more before going to
school
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, which will
influence
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child
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furture
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future
further
. There are others who reckon that
experience
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teenager
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a teenager
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,at
school
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have
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great
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influence
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the
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future
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.In my point of view, I believe the wisdom gained as a
teenager
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 at
school
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 will have a great impact
in
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 their
future
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.
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 with, when a
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new born
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newborn
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,
step
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 into
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 world and open
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 eyes, everything will be new for the
child
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.
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, creativity begins here,by the things he
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.
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, the
child
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do
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 not know,what
are
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 all that? Only parents tutor the
child
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, everything about the world.
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 knowledge and
experience
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 gained by the
child
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 will
influence
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the
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their
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future
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life
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.
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,by a recent thesis, it is proved that the
experience
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 gained by the infant in the initial
stage
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 after birth, will
influence
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 their
future
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.
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,
teenage
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teenager
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 is
the
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apply
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one of the
lovely
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most lovely
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stage
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stages
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 in our
life
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 we came across. some people
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think
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thing
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think
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 that
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experience
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experiences
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 gained as a
teenager
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,at
school
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are
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is
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 influential .
The teenagers
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Teenagers
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 are good observers and learners, they observe everything keenly and raise questions regarding that, to clear their doubts.
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 wisdom and curiosity
obatibed
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obtained
 as a
teenager
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 will have a great
influence
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in
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on
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 their
future
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. To
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illustrate
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illustrate
,
in
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apply
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a recent survey, it
is show
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is shown
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 that most
of
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the
student
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students
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 careers are decided in their teenage
stage
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 itself. To conclude,
experience
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 as a
child
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 develop creativity but the teenage
stage
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 give some time to think and decide our
future
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. So
i
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 believe
teenage
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the teenage
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stage
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influence
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influences
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 our
future
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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