The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

The environment is
a
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important thing for every single life on the earth not only for humans. So the best way for saving the earth is not to increase the
fuel
price
but to reduce, reuse and recycle. Raising the
fuel
price
will cause many problems
then
I absolutely disagree with
this
statement.
Firstly
,
fuel
energy and economy are related to each other, if a country tries to raise the
fuel
price
, the economy will collapse and every service fee will be
increasing
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but normal people still have the same income.
For instance
, when the
price
of gas is
raising
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transportation costs are going to grow
up
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the same as the ratio of previous profits.
Therefore
we can save the world by many
option
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but in my notion,it must not
to
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be raising the
fuel's
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fuel
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price
because
this
is a really bad way for our economy and can lead the world to be harder
to
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a poor country.
Secondly
, Reducing and Reusing
are
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the best way to save the environment because we can reuse our thing
such
as plastic bottle and
paper
once again or maybe until it is unusable. So we are unnecessary to waste more
paper
and plastic.
For example
, many offices usually waste
paper
for their work routine
but
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,
actually
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they can use paperless devices
such
as Ipad or
Tablet
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to work as good as
paper
.
Thus
, we can save the environment by many methods, it is unnecessary to be a huge solution but we can start from ourselves and begin from our home and office. In conclusion,
fuel
and energy are a dramatic necessity for humans, and in
this
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present day, we can not live without them so it is absolutely a bad idea to save the world by
discourage
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the
price
of
fuel
.
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