The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over a decade,

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process has been discussed and debated. Some people argue that the best way for education is not based on standard methods, but which

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mandatory. In my opinion, I partially agree with

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notion. Students should aware of the dynamic trends and curiously apply some concepts from fundamental theories.

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, the World has been changing due to Globalization.

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society lectures should be modified according to

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country's development would not change directly or indirectly. One clear example is that, knowing fact that 'today's children are tomorrow's

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, students should follow the advanced technologies with traditional key methods.

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, a good base of static knowledge

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individuals when they encounter difficulties.

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, children having dynamic trends without knowing fundamentals,

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can not able to tackle the complete problem.

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, to invent new technology without having static

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the requirement.

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helps learners survive in the modern

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with fundamental and advanced technologies. To sum up, Static

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coping with updating items should be prioritized, a better educational system should be based on basic theories.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

🔶Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

The image explains how Pu-erh ripe tea and raw tea are made

With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even treatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?