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Some people believe study in a marketing is important. What is your opinion?

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I am
 Liton Chandra Das from a beautiful little country named Bangladesh, in South Asia.I studied at a
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 of Bangladesh. My
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subject was
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subject is
Bachelor
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 of Business Administration (BBA) which is a major in management.
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's performance was not satisfactory. So I decided that what
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degree based
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degree based
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 so many different types of companies in the world, big and small, with
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the advancement
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many creative
 startups are being born. Whether a new creative startup or an
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old giant
 company, each has its own marketing strategy and policies. In
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today competitive
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 it is not impossible to survive without
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marketingand
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marketing and
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 is now becoming more and more
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attractive to
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I started
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I started
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my bachelor's
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 the balance of work and study was
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maintained properly
, the
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 was closed for a long time due to the Corona epidemic and all kinds
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of examinations
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 activities were suspended.
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, I converted my job to full-time and I am still working as a
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, my
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to grow
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to grow
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 and full-time job created a
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 of obstacles to my study.
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, so my
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's final year performance was not good for these reasons.My
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's
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 was not completed due to not being able to get a minimum
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pass mark
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 the poor performance of the
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, I decided to redo the
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 again.Combining my
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 I want to build my skills as an extraordinary. As
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a result
, I started looking for
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 in the country and abroad,after enough research and analysis, I
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 found my desired subject at the MykolasRomeris
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 (
MRU
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) and
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 Branding and Advertising Management.
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The study
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content
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 has impressed me a
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of potential
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of potential
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. My
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has inspired
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has inspired
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. I have a
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about client
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about client
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 skill development. I have significantly followed the
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worlds best
 companies and various chain shops for social media marketing
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strategies and
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strategies and
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 creation ideas. As I mentioned earlier, I think
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very promising
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, and gaining knowledge in
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 will expand my
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. 
MRU
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 is undoubtedly
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an international
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an international
 and qualified
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, and the city of Vilnius is a remarkable city with a mix
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of tradition
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a friendly
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this study
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this study
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 from
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Study abroad
  • International exposure
  • Job market
  • Cultural exchange
  • Broad worldview
  • Prestigious institutions
  • Study programs
  • Cultural shock
  • Adapting
  • Homesickness
  • Emotional challenges
  • Financial cost
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