Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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becoming popular as parents are encouraging their kids to engage in them. Some are of the opinion that
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should partake in payless
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activities in their free
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as
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can be of benefit to both
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as well as the
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.
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essay will discuss why I totally support the opinion. The two main reasons are
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improvement personal skills and great for their CV.
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of all,
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in
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significantly improve their personal development skills compared to those who didn’t.
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is because by interacting with members of the neighbourhood, they get to experience life
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, patience, tolerance, self-confidence and importantly, compassion for others
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built.
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, it's an important opportunity for those
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looking forward to getting a job in the future. A CV which contains
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what managers fish out for these days because it portrays a hardworking, compassionate, and resilient individual.
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are the bedrock of any society
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; their
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will be of utmost importance to the development of the
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. By having
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involved in
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, parents or elders ‘neighbours have some weights lifted off their
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. Chores sure as lawing, babysitting, and cleaning on weekends,
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, could give more
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for families to bond.
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, the rate of crimes will
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. All the
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used in creating chaos will be channelled into creating a better life for themselves thereby, limiting crime rates in the society. In conclusion,
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partaking in payless
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activities in their free
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can be of benefit to both
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as well as the
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. I absolutely support
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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