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Nowadays in many countries traditional customs are becoming less popular than in the past. Do you agree or disagree? What can parents and teachers do about this?

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Most countries around the world follow their own unique
culture
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 and
traditions
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 inherited for generations. In recent years, historical customs are becoming things of the past due to the occurrence of civilization and disbelief in
Traditions
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. I strongly agree with
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 notion,
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 parents and teachers have a vast responsibility which will be discussed in
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 with, people are more conversant about the modern way of living, which makes them forget about the
culture
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. To illustrate
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, 80% of children nowadays do not know their family customs because they believe the world is evolving and there is no need
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 it. Moreso people have no
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 in
traditions
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 again. With regards to steps parents and teachers can do,
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, the schools can organize an excursion for their students, especially to the traditional museum.
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 will helps them to be more familiar with the
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.
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, they tend to see the beauty of tradition and appreciate it more.
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, when I was in high school, my school organized a memorable vacation where we went to a small village near a city to explore.
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, the parents should inculcate the idea of telling their offspring about ancient customs. To simplify
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, guidance should learn more about
Traditions
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 and translate them to story for their children. In conclusion, youngsters are not interested in
culture
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 anymore because of the high level of exposure to modern things.
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, guidance and teachers
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 many roles to play. Whereby, they can learn about the
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 and tell the youngsters in form of a story to make it more fascinating to them. As well as, the school should provide time for outings to explore especially at the museum to witness how awesome Tradition is.
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