Some poeple say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think thank advertising is so common that we no longer pay attenition to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there are various ways and platforms to promote the
items
to the community and
and
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notified by
people
easily. Some of them think that advertising helps them to
purchase
the
items
while others are not.
This
essay will discuss both opinions of advertising.
To begin
with, one of the successes of advertising is that
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companies
companys
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companies
know the customer's
need
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needs
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and how to attract
people
's
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attention
attentioin
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attention
. Companys are
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sensitive
sensetive
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sensitive
about
current
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trend that attracts both old and young ages and put up the
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
on the various platforms.
For example
, some
companies
do a collaboration with famous influencers or make
an attractive commercial songs
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an attractive commercial song
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to attract
people
's eyes and reminded
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them to
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to
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their
head
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for a long time.
Hence
, customers can identify the
items
easily and lead to
purchase
them.
Besides
that,
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
are everywhere and easy to buy them.
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Audience
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are able to see commercial
video
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videos
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on every social media
such
as youtube or
instagram
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Instagram
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. The videos are uploaded on internet platforms together with the link so that
people
will
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at the product details and
purchase
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purchases
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.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that a handful of
people
find
unsuccessful
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. One of the
reason
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is similar things are sold by different
companies
. A number of them produce
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duplicate
the famous products with better quality or even cheaper price. Buyers are smart and there
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ways to compare the
items
in order to
purchase
the
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item
with
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affordable
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price.
This
could create
a
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competition among the
companies
and
hence
, bring
the
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similar taste to the consumers.
Moreover
,
people
are moving fast and
not
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attention to the advertisements. Today, the
adult
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adults
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ages are busy with their work so easily intend to skip the commercial video due to lack of time.
Also
, a number of them find the advertisements are considered
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a
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spam so they do not bother to look at them in detail. In
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conclusion
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conclusion
, the
creativie
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creative
advertising is helped to promote the products,
however
, the
companies
also
have to look at alternate ways to not be seen as
a
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spam to some
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audiences
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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