One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

What is the difference between expectation and reality in a
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life
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It is believed that the life of a
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looks perfect. They can easily travel to see many wonderful places,
to
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make
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an
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amazing photos, and have breakfast with a view of the Eiffel Tower. Everybody
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only
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side. So
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talk about
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. In my opinion,
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a
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is
a
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complicated work. The first point is they are too rare
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their relatives.
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if you have a trailer on wheels with
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wife and children,
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it is possible to feel
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. Not every person can deny from relative’s support. That’s why some
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travelers
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have a life partner and children. The second point is they have to always move and every time they stop in an unknowing place, which
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sometimes can be perilous. For
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if your booking is canceled. Or you meet
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. Or you have been bitten by a dangerous insect. The third point is with time the magic of travelling
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are becoming
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bored. Some
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say that
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you do not feel inspiration, curiosity or satisfaction.
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, there are other points of view. Some people consider that all these disadvantages do not concern all
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. And there are enough people who love to travel alone, who enjoy journeys without anybody.
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there are travellers who are satisfied with perilous journeys and risks. For
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it does not matter who are your neighbors. To summarise we can say that In spite of the above people keep becoming
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travelers
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, most travellers consider the trips as difficult work and suffer from loneliness and uncomfort
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • elderly population
  • health care systems
  • pension funds
  • extended family relationships
  • quality of life
  • aging population
  • economic growth
  • volunteer work
  • expertise
  • financial planning
  • retirement
  • age-related diseases
  • medical research
  • healthier lifestyles
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