In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

In most of the advertisements,the
business-men
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pay too much attention to the fact that their objectives are the latest versions in some way. As there are
lots
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lot

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of
competitions
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competition

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nowadays,the
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businesses

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business men
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businessmen

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need to attract the attention of the
customers
more than the others.
First
of all, the
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businessmen

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business men
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businessmen

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have to make the
customers
believe in their
products
. If people do not trust the quality of the
products
, the advertisers cannot be
successful
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more successful

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rather than their opponents.Their
things
should be qualified enough for
customers
to purchase them. Having the
customers
’ trust is one of the best ways to raise
quantity
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of their
products
as they have already had the belief of the buyers. Only if they advertise that their
products
are the latest version, people will be addicted to the
things
as most
of
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the teenagers are obsessed with
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of the new
things
. To my way of thinking, emphasizing that their
products
are modernistic in some way can have positive impacts not only
for
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on

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the buyers but
also
for
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the
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businessmen

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business men
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businessmen

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.
From
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In

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the
customers
’ opinion, they are too satisfied to buy the modernistic
things
in
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these days.
Moreover
, they will not have any hesitations to purchase
this
product again.From the
business
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businessmen’

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men’
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view, they will have more opportunities than their opponents to produce
another new
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another new product
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products
to introduce
the
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customers
because they already have had the trust of the people. In conclusion, the more they advertised their
products
, the more they get attention from the
customers
.
Therefore
, I claim that
this
has a great impact on both
customers
and
the
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